If it is not real it certainly seemed so....nice emotion and stuff with the words u used etc.
"but this pen cant even comprehend what im writin
kuz my whole life is soo fucked up to some it might seem excitin "
I liked that part also. Rhyme scheme very simple...no multis and other such stuff (refer to tutorial if u don't no what a multi is) Had a cool easy message but complexing your style a bit would have helped to make it more interesting.


Reply to my effort at this url plz. seen
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120515

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