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Old 04-25-04, 02:49 PM   #11
E Looch
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nice battle pretty even in this one check it

insidiuos one thing first its text so try an make your endings rhyme better but not a very good vere overall punchs werent hittin that hard personals were not there didnt see much i liked and if you aitn fealin a verse then dont rush it aint no time limits fuck em if they bitchin just do ya thang
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it's time to slaughter this cow, even tho there wasn't beef to start with,
my line's penetrate u leavin u believin i'm "heart-less",

visionz i was fealin the rhyme scheme nice shit came with good multies decent opener had a lil bit of everything wasnt fealin the ending i see wha you was doin though it was orginal but a weak punch overall good flow in the verse just work on harder hittin punchs
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You myopic? cause I'd never hit you while you're wearing-your-glasses/
No? Good! neither was yo sis--here's your shot at sharing-her-gashes/

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