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Old 04-25-04, 08:13 PM   #11
Rising Sun
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Classic asked tha question am I a business organisation//
U damn straight I’m ‘Da’ billion-dollar ‘Classic’ corporation//
This shit is getting red hot like its DaClassic’s fuckin cremation//
II’m smoother than white chocolate, franchize is the vanilla thrilla//
My rhymes are automatic just like jumpshots from Reggie Miller//
Classic beat me first, I never knew miracles could happen//
Cuz his wack ass spit belongs in the place I take a crap in//
weak ending, nice flow, really good vocab, and make sense, straightforward good personalks and wordplay but u need metaphors... but sick verse man....and nice punches....



I couldn't recall it, Beginning of lyrical leaders fraternity?
Whose this franchize player, I'll place him on the bench for eternity
Spots are taken at my elevation center, Finding one is rare
Stupidity does not qualify as a handicap, So park elsewhere

nice ending, sick flow, really good vocab, and make sense so u simialr to the franchize but u lacked personals, wordplay and metaphors... ur punches hit very hard...but since u didnt have the devices...imo have to give it to franchize...if u had more literary devices u would have taken it easily ....reallyl good battle...sorry no hate
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