im not sure i can list all that is wrong with this rhyme...but let me try

1. Amature wordplay
2. Bad structure
3. subpar vocab.
4. very basic rhymes


theres more trust

this is juss very basic, every aspect of the rhyme needs work, this is complete garbage, its a worn out type of topic, and it aint a good topic anyway

anyway...........3/10

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