Aight check it.. quick had this for sure.. so I'm gonna analyze your verse so you can elevate:

look at dis quickpunch kid beggin for fame//
he tryin to get his hustle on,he tryin to expose his name//
ok this is kinda played, and the rhyme is very simple, just replacing one letter.
but he cant cuz all his punches always comin out lame//
sit back relax and watch me murda dis cat in his own game//
same deal withe the rhyme, and the punches are weak, not original at all
cuz im a nonstop superial, individual, physical, type of criminal,//
mentally like the chemical//
mentally like chemical makes no sense. and this is a battle, stick to dissing him.
kid you need a miracle to reach my level//
ima keep the lyrical flow it aint gon never be settled//
see you could have flipped the first line to make a punch, maybe use a nice setup line... but as it is there is no metah or anything, its just weak.
quickpunch call the cops when you see me dawg//
cuz dis shit wont stop til you see me fall//
why would you fall?
Q.P. killa and im raised like a pimp//
come and see me in the swamp bout that gangsta shit you punk bitch//
flow is poor, and this isn't even a punch.

aight basically, work on using the concepts and flip them to make a nice, original, hard hitting punch. and put personals in there. and up your rhymes. dawg and fall dont rhyme, pimp and bitch don't rhyme.

peace.

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