Yo from New York but yo flow ain't got shit on Jigga
Matter of fact you belong with them squad up Niggas
ok, ok
You know the cock sound that mean I'm bout to pop rounds
Look kid you wouldn't make it one block in Chi-Town
not so ok
But off the city Im a BadBoy Like Diddy
Take yo work you a be losing weight like Missy
um.. no.
You couldn't move a Gram you more like the Kitchen Man
Spittin yo flow you takin a chance cause you couldn't even MAKE THE BAND
eh...
60-40 I'll whip you ass like Roy
Kill that noise for a fuck around Killa a boy
um... no.

your structure was messed up, your punches were kinda weak, you lacked any great personal.


Rhymes'll devour Lost Child...I saw this kid yesterday on "Fags Gone Wild"...../
Leave you runnin' for miles Like puff daddy runnin' the marathon..Change ya style../
ok.. ok.. not great..
You Can't rap for shit dawg you just a follower...I run "Dee" Block LIke jadakiss.../
Kid found his name on da wackest emcees crew now he like YA I MADE THE LIST../
still stretched out, but the punch made me smile. good use of humor
You missin' sum'n he like I NEED TO FIND MY FLOW..dawg give me my map back.../
This "child" carries pokemon cards I carry 2 straps like backpacks........./
yeah... not so much
You mus be jokin,Like Tom cruise..Gettin' in my crew is a "Mission Impossible"../
Like a man goin 300/mph with no breaks, My Rhymes are Unstoppable....../
ok, ok. could have done better with that first line as a lead in.. the second line wasn't a punch.
Facin' da Bwoy? A loss is possible....You beatin' me? probablll.......-Y not....../
Dont piss me off' cause the world will come to an end like George Bush on Pot.../
i like the hesitation.. the closer ain't great though.. but decent i guess

ok.. your verse had punches at least pretty consistently.. still gotta work on stringing two lines together to make one punch.. work on getting more personal punches in there, but you had this easily.

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