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Old 04-29-04, 10:01 AM   #21
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This cat Came in Insultin, though his Game Is Revoltin//
His rhymes are full of shit.....even his Name Is In Colons//
Lettin Two Spray, another loss...what would your Crew Say?//
Leave your head so full of 'Notts' people are askin.....'U.K?'//
I'm Spittin Logic, while he just can't cope, This Kid's Retarded//
I gotta boot him in the head........just to Kick Some Knowledge//
I spit like Forty Five's......got you meetin Your Demise//
And feedin off my shit......just like a Swarm Of Flies//
Hit you like Infantry Regiments when you're Seekin Out Veterans//
RB indicted you for wackness... I'm just Leakin The Evidence//

Aight.... not a bad verse... some attempts at wit. Only problem is that the rhyme scheme gets elementary in parts and the flow suffers in a few lines. Other than that not a bad verse. Get rid of the // however... it just takes away.

see ya name is straight by definition cuz how u wins a 'Mystery'-
see u could b micheal jackson but still not re-write 'History'--
dont get pissed-wit-me cuz ma shit comes out more 'crisperly'-
you couldnt be 'tight' if u was a 'chinese nun' an still not lost ya 'virginity'--
so ure enygmatic? u couldnt 'spray' if u was an 'automatic' u 'suck' like a 'vac-matic'-
u couldnt 'pack-shit' if i stuffed 'faeces' in ure pockets-
n u couldnt blow me up if u started spittin rockets-
see u must have a fascination with assasination cuz for chattin shit i'ma end ya whole life creation-
then i'll 'wrap'(rap) this shit up like mummyfication, leavin yo ass on perminant vacation--
you could mettamorphasize, shit u gone wish u was a cat cuz defeatin me gone take u at least 9 lives--
now theres a loss of weight cuz i just smashed another heavyweight-
aint no debate, when u stepped up to the plate u concealed ure own fate--
you just got lyrikally raped.....
see battlin me is like fightin a heavy mobb, best keep ya day job cuz u'll get robbed--
now look at the situation, you just got cut down like dead plantation

First off, DIE for explaining punches. Next.... wow that was a simple ass verse... Crisperly isnt a word by the way.... that shows a total lack of skill when you resort to making up words to keep up that simple ass rhyme scheme. I have no idea how you got a vote.... Seriously... you lacked wit and any decent punches.


Vote- Enygma
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