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Old 04-29-04, 01:02 PM   #11
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Not the best verse I've seen you drop chrit by any means:

Vango? Hell no... I'm tired of these fucking newbies
So I'll knock ya the fuck out... with just my mood swings
i've seen this concept before, but nice punch
See what it brings... when you be flipping concepts that are still wack
I mean kids got more throwback rhymes in his verse than a Fabolous track
ok, ok.. not as great
I've had it you fag, you cant win... so why try?
When Boys to Men isnt a group... it describes ya sex life
also played concept but still nice
I'm that nice... while you're just another ugly dude
Halloween was months ago, but I still have an urge to chuck candy at you
this was ok
Sure to lose... so honestly kid... conteplate a no-show
Then pack up and leave relaunched...
just get in ya van

and go
good wordplay off his name, but the closer wasn't that great

Vango.. it seemed to me like you were stressed out.. and forgot to bring it:

How you got the audacity to test my mental capacity,
im like Billy the Kid of RB, so why dont you hop along Cassidy
nice multis, but the punch is pretty weak
See im gonna keep this rhyme short like your rap career
cuz if rappin was alcohol youd be a lite beer
ok, nice use of meta and nice flow, punch not that great
Tastes great, naw this kid is less fillin, see id write a better rhyme
BUT YOU REALLY AINT THAT APPEALING
yeah that might work against a newb.. but i think the punch loses some effect against vets.. anyway ok punch
So why dont you be a good boyscout and go take a hike
this cats so stupid he tripped over a cordless mike
your verse was good until this. this sucked hard. two lines, totally unrelated, elementary rhyme, jokes I've head 10 years ago...
you battlin me is like a sword with no blade, a gun with no bullets and a lamp with no shade
this was kinda cool, but again it kinda messed up the flow of your verse to just randomly have this in there.. and its not a great punch
SEe you got as much chance of beating me as you do winnin the lottery
cuz you could douse your self with gasoline,set your self on fire and still not be as hot as me
chance of winning the lottery punches are played, and you didn't flip it creatively... that closer was just kinda weak

Ok so basically you both had punches I wasn't really feeling and some punches I was feeling, but adeb had way more of the second category, and also at least brought a personal with the name.. I didn't see that from Vango.
also he used less played concepts, so v/adeb.
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