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Old 04-29-04, 03:35 PM   #14
M&rk
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ite yo nope, yo ass verse to long and u had no wordplay or punches really, jus personals that weren't witty at all, i didnt like it, and your stucture sucks but its ok if u put more rhymes in there so it flow into a punch, thats how i do it.
solo, good stucture, too plain though i dont like it, it was better agianst me, u can flow into a punch better.neither of ya'll had any wordplay, and wordplay into puches with flow, is how u do this stuff. since ya'll ddint really do anything i liked but solo had sumin that i could read
vote-solo
yo this an honest vote, hit up my signiture agiasnt that fuckin dillard character
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