u got a couple of things to fix on that
1) u need to write it in bars
2) u need to read it over to make sure it makes sense cause your line "so before u come nigga let me know" didnt make any sense when your talkin about the hood cause u gotta be ready at all times when somethin go down
3)stay on one topic first u tlkin bout niggas shootin then u talkin bout u shootin which doesnt go along wit the topic
i aint really like this 1, i've read better work from u homie whats going on

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