woah, i thought this jay tree fuck who aparantly beat me was supposed to be a so called "vet" and be good. this verse is wacker than the one i some how lost to. you had weak weak weak punches. kids were calling my rhymes elementry in our battle....but nah no way, your shit is elementry. my shit was just writin to fit on a bar, and it made sense. your shit is too long, doesn't really have much substance, but it rhymes more than once in a line, so i guess the kids enjoy it somehow. the really sad thing here is that your verse is actually better than this other kids verse. his is pitiful. sounds like he ripped off other verses that he thought sounded cool and tried to piece together something. thesis telekenesis....um tell me what those words mean and you might gain a little credibility....since i have heard them spit by a real emcee in that order. you are trying way to hard to sound smart, when in fact it makes you look even dumber than you are. your verse was all over the place. no structure, but even i can look past that if you have good punches...which you didn't. make your own shit up, and go from there. you should have been able to beat jay tree or whatever his name is with ease, he gave this to you with a cherry on top but you fucked it up some how.

sadly i vote for jay

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