I like it, I like the time progression, especially the second stanza because I think you played the emotion really well there. The only thing I wish you had was maybe a stanza right before the last one, sort of leading into it, although the abruptness and shortness of the last two lines does add some allure to it. I also feel like the first stanza feels a bit out of place, although it might just be too early in the morning (yes.. morning) for me, and I'm missing something.

Nice though.

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