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Old 05-02-04, 11:32 PM   #16
Shadows edge
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You try to be hard so i Accepted Your Call-Out//
But after im done rippen u ur gonna have to Crawl-Out//
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Spikey u have no spike ur more like a Stick//
Your rhymes are Busted like a Foriegn Flick//
um.. ok concept on the first line i guess... but not well worded, second line is whack
Your record is horrible but it reps its Holder//
Im spitten Fire while ur spits get Older and Colder//
do better with the first line.. second line whack again
You shouldnt have challenged me u bit off more then u can Chew//
Your the worst on this site..And u wonder why u cant get in a Crew//
ok.. decent personal again.. but stop using generic punches
Well this sums up another loss added to your Record//
I just Squashed u like a Was a Stampeding Herd//
no


come on man yo shit was weak as hell i thought
i heard a dowbell/
u got no types wins caus u scared caus i'm fin
to fry yo ass medium raw/
rhyme? terrible
i called u out caus u talkn shit for nother bitch
that can hardly spit/
what da fuck was u try do there u aint rap'n
against winnie the pooh bear/
worse
u thought this shit was gon 2b easy but my raps
is makn u queezy /
so dont try to fuckn tez me cause u cant even reach
me/
worse
i know u angry but i'm hungry i had to try to
yo ma stone see so i can suck on her little tities/
after i'm done with u you'll be another mother fucka
issue/
horrible


terror wins for being way less whack. spikey gets no advice, you suck to much, just go listen to rap until you understand what a rhyme is. terror, you gotta use more wordplay and metahs to develop your punches... like for the spikey line, don't just say he has no spikes so he's like a stick, say something more like "that name doesn't fit you, you got as many spikes as a stick" or something. i mean the concept isn't great but at least work on the wording or something.
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