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Old 05-02-04, 11:44 PM   #14
Willa
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wow we got mad unexplained votes
justin nice flow and thats about it u need 2 work on ur vocab personals didnt c many multis and evening out ur lines overall an ok verse but need elevation
good flow punches personals and structure u simply out did justin u could work on ur vocab and more personals though
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