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Old 05-03-04, 06:54 PM   #20
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STiLL Da FUKKiN SiCKEST!!
 
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From: NyC,Da HOMe OF Da TWiN TOWER'S!
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aight umm im not writin a fukkin story but ima explain my vote good

opener-killa...u could of use dat rocket lines a lil betta..ryhmes i couldn't tell where ya shit eneded
structure-killa....ryhmes ya lines was every where dun u need da fix dat
punchlines-killa hands down
creativity-killa...
wordplay-nun from both
multis-nun
personals-nun
enjoyed-killa

explanation-umm if u not blind u could see dat ryhmes got merked it was hard da read ya lines cuzz u aint seperate em and da shit i could understand was corny...killa ya verse was hott u didn't even need no personal shit..ya creativty was good 2

my vote-killa
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=122043
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=121414
^^^^PLEEZ VOTE ON WUN OF DEZ YA'LL
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U NOT FUKKiN WiTH ME PLaiN N SiMP!...

Da "SiCKEST ON DiS SiTE" LiNE HaS BEEN USED aGaiNST ME 50 x'S...U DUDES aBUSED iT