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Old 05-04-04, 04:44 PM   #4
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sup dawg..

1--try droppin somethin longer next time...makes it more worth while to read


ok...

Flow was off because you rushed the lines

The rhyming was a tad basic too...try more internal rhyming

and multi-syllables


up imagery

jus elevate dawg

stay up

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