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Old 05-08-04, 12:41 AM   #21
Shadows edge
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First off... killah good to see you getting back on track, you were slipping for a while. This was better.

Like lightbulbs Ima burn this kid out till theres no more "wattz" left-
Turn this match into a violent battle like a 'ball game with no ref-
second line, blah. first line tight
Bitch is wack..thats why he doesnt want to show his 0-32 record-
Kid Falls back..while im hoppin to the top of the boards like checkers-
decent meta, pretty nice punch, nice rhyme scheme

lol you thought that was it niggga^ here we go bitch

Switchin N flippin da script..Couldnt be ontop even if god gave u a lift-
On sum acrobatics shit..like gymnastics Ya Verse'll get flipt-(flipped)
first line hot, second not.
Get Cut Up N' Ripped...Like brittney spears this kid is just a bitch-
My Rhymes're all chewed up N bit..Like A flammable can,Kid Is gettin Lit-
first line blah, second line meh
Kid thinks hes "bird man" bitch runnin like.."BRR its Da Killah Bwoy"-
Imma Killah bwoy..Like King Kong You Battlin' A Gorilla Bwoy-
eh... this is ok i guess.. but it flows annoying..


This nigga rockin the “knicks”so I’ma show him the “hardway”
Nigga aint skilled…if he was sick he wouldn’t have robbed jay
eh.. pretty decent
U rep new york ?Its juss a matter of time B4 u crash like da towers
Talkin shit lil nigga like ya rapper you’ll be dead in a couple hours
rapperz punches are played, and there aint much here
You aint ill..all u do is murder noob’s to get wins but you’re a newb 2
Ur whack the only people that gave props on ur open mic was ya crew
eh.. the rhymes are weak here, and the punches are kind of elementary. decent personals though
i’ma show u lyrical destruction when I hit u wit tha 9 smash u in half
If ur so fuckin ill u wouldn’t have to sway votes to beat marvolus’s ass
eh.. the first line is nothing special, the second is pretty decent personal again
U have the nerve to have gloves in ya sig when u cant complete a punch
I threw so many punches down ya throat its like your eatin punches 4 lunch
second line is horribly played. first line is ok


aight its like this.. watz you had really played concepts for your punches, and your personals were decent concepts but not executed all that well. id say work on your wording, try to up the rhyme because your flow/structure aint great, and try to up the wordplay. nice concepts, but the punches just dont hit hard because they seem kinda played, but the personals are a nice touch. killah you kinda lacked the personals, and some of your punches are just bleh (like britney spears you just a bitch..wtf). however, that first line was the best of the battle.. so i dont know.. this is really hard to call.

v/ killah... but very tight.
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