well alright...Im kinda bias cuz i love latino guys BUT:

ur rhyme scheme was good to me but some ppl would get bored with it becuz it's a lil to repetitive and u have no multies in the middle of ur rhymes...that would make it better..

this was 2 bars so it wasn't really much to go off of..but ur directions was clear through out the entire spit...it was ok for ur first spit on of ur first spit on here keep elevating pa *dueces*

SB

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