the name is D-Bate, and I'm reppin the Bank/
my lyrics take out more souljah's than a fuckin tank/


^^ WACK

my lyrics are like bombs, blowin out in your face/
when I drop a verse, you cowards get put in your place/
tryin to step to the plate, with this Heavyweight/
somethin loose in your brain? are you fuckin insane.

^^ ur ramblin off at the mouth and this isn't making sense...how is this a diss to him?

was that it? ha ok i gotta own you for think that was good//
the hearse ride next to you well you take one step in my hood//
^^^ decent opener
just cause you got pac as an avatar doesn't mean you a thug//
and it you crew don't move all y'all asses get a slug//
only one cause i might have to use it on someone real//
before i'm over you already asking to cut a deal//

^^ haha...nice personal and decent closer

Vote: AKA...punches actually landed...verse more focused...made more sense