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Old 05-11-04, 07:57 PM   #20
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20 grand
good spit nice flow good punches you kept it flowing real good
it was maybe one of ur best, u did good real good

favorite line:
You cant handle this like a car with out a steering wheel//
Your a fuckin "fruit", only u dont have "appeal"// (<--- get it, a peel)
that was pretty hott
areas u need inprove ment on::::::::::::
multies meta4's and similies
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u had and ok spit eric 89
but it didnt keep me intrested it was kinda wack no offense
u had ok punches they were kinda childish
u had ok structure
and the flow was terribly off
areas u need improvement on:
punches and structure and the structure will really help ur flow
bets line:ut ohh someones chokin under all the heat
ima chew u up and spit u out like a lion does to raw meat
u liked it cuz u used a similie
but my vote swings the way of 20 grand
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