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Old 05-12-04, 12:22 PM   #11
The Jett
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G....you got 23 wins?,when does talent Begin?
Cus every Time I see you, I see my timbs...
Nice opener.....OK personal....great metiphore
Callin urself g-killa?please dont make me emphasize...
Your claimin harcore..thugman..wit your internet ties,
Good personal.....good vocab
He's like Tupac, 2 times circumsized..minus the lines.
Shit....take away 2 inches, n this killa's a Dime.....
Funny ass punch, hard punch....funny metiphore
Thats right Im white, U don't see me quote'n like a fan
Readin magazine's...an watchin Em wit Lotion in my hand
Great Personal....Funny metiphore
Just face it...G, it's what you are...continue spectating
an quit the dic'tasting...just to upp your rapperz rating
Ok punch...decent personal...
You and your crew, define what you are...Mispelled Mayhem
And don't deny it...If Em was single, u'd all try n date'em
Funny personal.....good diss....lil off on flo...

Overall....a pretty solid verse....shit flowed nice untill the last line..Mayhem..n ...Date'em...no...lol...
Punches and personals were there....
The metiphores were right on key....nice drop...

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My Punches are like a silent pp7 hits hard wit no noise...
Battlin this fack MC named CB cuz he loves the Cute Boys...
Ok metiphore....His name's not CB....personal?
Playin wit your sex toys man CueBalls just a flamIn-fag...
I got CueBall turned into a bitch he is blaming-his-rag...
Sex punch...played....Rag punch....played
Got his gay porno mag and he is ready for some action...
Say We Love Em but his ass on 8mile is your distraction...
gay porno punch...played.....second line looks liek a feed
My rymes leve him tearful and my flow leaves him fearful...
Told him I would write his next verse now he is cheerful...
weak multi's.....vocab was kinda soft here
He gave the white towel a throw, he is callin this battle quits...
I dont need to flow....
I'll knock you out wit my lyrical hits...
Lyrical hits.......no
Back to normal flow so my verse can burry CueBall alive...
Soon to be 0-5.. This Rap Battle site your never gun survive...
u have to survive a battle site? bad closer

Overall....I thought this was incredibly weak....especially from a so-called vet....What was this?....seriously....once u break it down, You really didnt have any hard hittin punches at all, and your structure kept shifting and screwin up your flo....

I dunno these days.......

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