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Old 05-13-04, 01:09 AM   #1
DFrost
Flyweight
 
Posts: 157
From: NY
IP:

only halfway decent punch-
i'm a real murderer u aint no fukin killa//
itz like we aint got handz can't nobody feel ya//

ok murederous your whole verse was mad weak, coulda been u tryin too hard to get the letters to line up right but whatever it was u didn't use multis punches or vocab in a bunch of stretched unstructured, sometimes unrhyming lines

general hood- you came at the guy hard, if it was audio, freestyle and you spit mad fast the last half of your verse would have been alright, here you need punches though, ya had the one, and your shit made sense to read anyway your lines in bars rhymed and connected unlike the other guys
both of ya need work on structure and punches vote- general hood