Yo first off I wanna congratulate both of you for not makin me sit through 10-20 lines of garbage...I always like seein decent textcees.....and to my breakdown.


Lyrikal master-mind? combine a death wish with stable-rhymez,
take a verbal BEATING...just like scoliosis i leave curves in-ya-spine,
Not a bad opening, dont hear scoliosis too often..
u'll never make it big, this kid will never have ice like hot freezers,
hows he gunna 'get big' and 'come hard' when he jerks off wit tweezers!!
not a super punchline but good
explosions in ur advatar, what's that all about?
never shot a gun, only "clickity-click" u get is from ur mouse,
decent wordplay punchline but I think u coulda made this nastier w/ a multi
ur mouth spits from ear-to-lips so how can u claim u spit hot?
i'll shove my foot so far up C's ass and wear his large intestine for tube socks,
This is hot except for being so stretched
this MC STINKS! but of course he earned the smell,
lesson 1, before u battle me, learn how to spell,
illiterate ppl piss me off, this guy's an MC who's lyrics won't sell,
the only way u having hot underground shit is if u rappin in hell,
fuck destruction, i'm a living obstruction to justice, killin u'n'all,
kill u, blow up the hearse and make u walk to ur funeral.
These last parts were kinda basic for you... it just kinda fell off a little bit, the learn how to spell flowed well but it was basic, hot underground and hell is an old concept- the funeral line was decent. I give you a 7 outta 10

0k.....
i'll rap b0ut gunz juzt ta get u scared-y0_
gl0cks dat'll leave u p0p'd wit n0 brainz like a scare-cr0w_
decent opener i actually like this probly more than I should.
i palm t00ls like "GoodWrench" but i aint w0rkin-0n-cars_
da t00ls i palm,i juzt squeeze and if u d0nt die ur w0rkin-wit-scars_
Nice wordplay metaphors and punchline...good example of a battle bar right here
diz dudez gay he club-wit-guyz_
s0 if i killed him y0 his l0ve-will-cry_
im way iller and m0re advanced in rhymen_
s0 i suggest u st0p,n0 im demandin u like sim0n_[sim0n says]
this was kinda basic but it flowed nicely-
leave u kut "different ways" like a diamond_
kuz all i live is drug dealin and gangstaz wh0 l0ve vi0lence_
u up in da suburbs liven in heaven_
reality check,when i blast da tech u'll really be liven in heaven_
This made me laugh- good couple of bars
Ha! ya b0i said u sh0uld battle me? 0k,but why u rappin f0r_
when u kn0w imma put 14 lines in ya ta leave ya ass feelin s0re_[n0 h0m0]
weak closer- I think u coulda come harder here..... I give you a 7.2 outta 10 cuz you had 2 really funny punches here but mixed in good wordplay throughout w/ a couple multies... Vote goes to Cream..... Please guys return the favor w/ some honest votes'
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