this is my first spit on this thread so dont dis me 2 much im llokin for some feed back so i can elevate

im here to show these rookies how this shyt is done/
these kids soft as cookies fallin to my smokin gun/
travel to bitches blocks and let loose slugs/
thats the end of this lil pretty boy he got a holy mug/
thats the last time he eva gunna call himself thug/
yes im mean thats what im hear for/
violence is all my minds geared for/
you wanna hear more/
call me hova the way i make the crowd roar/
everytime man fuk the encore/

iight can i get some feed back on dis 1.............

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