...I teach all to spit frees//
But you've took less niggas to school than boycotted buses in the sixties//
decent opener - it had an o.k punchline I liked it
My whackest rhyme'll make you really seem dumb//
you only spit sick when you don't swallow ez e's cum//
egh not too great but decent
Don't think i'm complex? you're added body count for me to claim//
Half the rappers in rapbattles still cannot pronounce my name//
I liked this verse, good flow but it needed more wordplay
(50 cent, line flip)
make everybody watch ya torture like it's passion of christ dog//
and then i let the tek, SING, look at that light show//
This didn't really flow to well for me, but the first line has good wordplay +similie
I'll pimp you and ya mama for dolllas, i'm set for the wealth//
then load a gun, a make you play russian roullette wit ya self//
I liked this it was my fav bar, nice wordplay good structure throughout, nice flow
Finally crewed up, Branch Status understands me//
Forever screamin at you haters that i am what you can't be//
I like simple punchlines... All in all this was a good verse but I think you should just come harder with your punches in the future and keep your structure like that it looks like a cat thats been doin this for a while I like to see it good like that.
yo rhymes wack like Lkwon Tipsy,u wanna talk about my mom well urs wit me/u gotta a girl well u had one,cause i took her and now she havin my son/
This is an o.k bar but mom lines is played unless you have some special wordplay or somethin else in it to make it snap, I just didn't feel it that much.
im might be newbie but rhyme is killa,i dont stop like a spinna/cause im finna rip u up,and er'body kno im tha winna/
This was a weak line, no punchlines, the spinna line ws super weak but it had good flow
u jus came up short like JD,u soft so Im guess im rappin against JE/wat u kno bout me,im ur girl P.I.M.P./
the JE line was pretty good
Im tha prince of tha Chi, so i can seen dudes like u cry/Imma end it like this Maku,u boring so i aint got nuttin else 2 say 2 u-- This was a weak closer here... I think all in all this verse was kind of lacking, your punches were basic and not much wordplay- elevate bro. Vote- MakuJaiiLiin.. Please return the favor...
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