ok both need 2 work on vocab flow personal and mutli
ok t storm ur structure was better flow was better and u had better punches u need 2 work on ur vocab and personals and multis

fm ur first 2 lines were good and thats about it u need 2 work on ur vocab personals flow structure punches elevate u have some poential

so my bote goes 2 t storm with an overall better verse

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