Bullshit good battle. You know what a battle should have? A punch. Punches are good.

"Text Engraving Will aint Fazing my unorthadox spits...im~quick~to deliver death threats like terrorists//
first off, this structure is annoying, it makes it look like you only have half the lines you do have. also, no punch here. who cares how fast you deliver death threats?
She Like Niggaz The way she scared to Cum before this female ....contemplating~my~invasion thats why she took two weeks and answered my bitch~slapped through email//((Pm))
ok, a personal. boring though, because you didn't make it into a hard hitting punch.
but my words reversing her scripts~twisting her lips....to have her kissing her own Lisp//
eh... kind of a cool concept, but again i haven't heard her lisp, and the punch isn't really much
This Chick like a Living~*Will* the way she let me plan her death.... Like niccaz on the Special~Victims Unit im tearing through her chest to proclaim her death//
death should not be rhymed with death. the first line is decent, the second line fucked the whole thing up and brok the flow.
Will~a~peers reputation is non~existing likedis~A~PEERing text...to hand me an L she'd prolly recycle verses from the battles she won but even thats not her best//
how does she not have a reputation? this would work better if it were true... but a lot of people think she is a top femcee on this site. the second line here makes no damn sense.... how are the battles she won not her best? not a punch
disLOCATING her brain so she could think in my STATE.... detaching ya fait~and Gripping ya face so you frown cuz im not tryna make you smile like Lloyd Banks//
ok... decent concept, but again make a harder punch out of it... right now it just doesn't deliver very well, and you just string it in there with no set up or anything. and the second line is ass.
Will~A~peer get be~headed and De~crowned cuz she wack claiming the Queen... sink~ya body in agony to see if you could sail throw the pain i bring//
blah... and please lose the damn "~" ... they're annoying. could have made a good punch out of the queen thing, but totally blew it.
this Female like bodyguards the way she only follow behind...Will must spit in the dark cuz this bitch concepts aint as bright as mine//
again.. makes little sense. bodygaurds sometimes lead, they generally surround actually. not a great meta. and the bright thing is a totally played concept and the punch is boring. make it original somehow, or at least harder hitting.
im Lyrically Rape~in this chick so Consentual sex is what u lack... stripping~this Chicks words and beating her like the Color Purple or she was black//
wow she lacks consentual sex so its rape? how... boring. see it's way too simple, you need to make the metas way nicer than that to have a nice punch. the second line is just blah.
cuz she actin sweet wit posts of bullsht and verses of Fillers wit line she mezmorizing....getin my unches twisted easily so let me clear it up i aint no lesbian//"
this is a verse of filler. and lesbian and mezmorizing dont rhyme too well.


u can't deter gettin slurred with these innovative words
absurd leavin ur mind stirred only bein interred will occur
multies galore. punches not galore. too many multies, really, dont sacrafice a good punch for multies.
shes just another herb that dont get heard cause shes 2 basic
face it my complexity's just being wasted on this fuckin aphasic
eh... ok i guess. true that she is basic, but this isn't much of a punch, like calling someone ugly who is ugly... is true but not really a great punch. make something of it.
my words leave u in a pit confused with no c/r by ur side
shell try & b denied when her wacknes and my skill collide
blah
major obsession bleached her skin 2 match my complection
hope u like rejection after this there wont be a resurrection
blah
teachin u a lesson next time make sure ur circumspectant
thought u were a female till ur ridin sb gave u an erection
ok... not really too well worded... not really funny. you can do the transexual thing so much better... check me or native's battle against lk.
im here 2 show lady lyrical's rhymin skills are just satirical
better b fearful cause im god an i aint gonna give u a mirical
no real punch here again.


so overall, this was just really disapointing. will a peer... it's like you took R's style, and then took the few punches out. seriously, your verse had like one bar with a punch it, and that won't win shit. on the other hand, the first verse was extremely annoying, and didn't have any great punches, although there were somethings resembling a punch occasionaly. i suggest you both check out the league and elevated... work on metaphors, wordplay, punches, setups and so forth.

v/ first person for at least coming with some punches.

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