ima say it straight out, mad dog u took this one, but not by much, your punches didnt hit hard, you had a basic set up and followed it with about half a punch than broke your flow and tried to make the last part your actual punch and that don't work but consistancy one you this one, if you didnt have the expierience on him i doubt you would have won

eye- kid u had some hot concepts, i liked a lot of your shit but on this site u gotta do it in a specific style to win, check out the tutorial on punches to see what there lookin for, if you throw that creativity into hard hitting punches you'd be pretty good. another thing, your lines were fucked up, looked like you was doin it to a beat maybe but that ain't how they do it in text, try to make your lines about even and don't be afriad to press the 'enter' key after a line, make it easier to read.