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Old 05-26-04, 12:18 PM   #19
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structure-B
flow-B
metas-tie
punches-B
personals-tie
closer-Mic
opener-tie both weak
creativity-B
enjoyment-B

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B20's best lines

Tryna make money from rap but ya get humiliated..
So to support ya family ya cuz got smart n graduated..!!
I'ma stated role model...I see ya really look up to B..
I mean ya accepted my challenge to get close to me..!!

^^that shit was ill.....humoris and hard hittin.......
your structure was good and your flow was onpoint.......your punches was good and they hit hard.........not bad personals but you need to work on them so they hit harder........good verse.......pc


SwizZ's best lines

I'll Be The First To Tell Yall.....This Kid Has No Game.....
He Has A Whack Verse....And Noone Knows The Meaning To His Name.....

This Kid Gets Hanged....Even More Times Than I Hang "Hangers"
This Kid "Taps" More Senior Citizens......Then Damn GanG "BANGERS"....**

^^the first line was good and humoris.......but the second kind was kinda played in concept......
your structure was bad.......some places was good but other was stretched and you shouldnt space out your bars like that becuase it takes away from your flow and makes it hard to read.......your punches was okay but you need to reword them so that they hit harder.......keep elevating.......pc

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