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Old 05-26-04, 02:51 PM   #15
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this wasnt a good battle at all....

prodigy's best lines

This vergin got broken in by a prison guard in sing sing
You made his cock-ring ~ it became a sure thing

Picked up the phone and asked your mum to join in
The juices started to flow, so her head started to spin

^^^only two bars that rhymed.....
man you need to elevate.....your shit doesnt rhyme and your punches are wack.......reword your shit so that it hits harder and sticks........and make sure that you make your bars rhyme because if you dont do that your gunna lose either way man



virginia fool's best lines

this man thinks he gets lots of pussy,
but laying with ya cat dont count nigga so dont push me/
slaughter this queer 2 the point of non-re-apearin,
the point of your life is nearin, cause this big caucasin is what ya fearin/

^^^its sad that i had to use these as your best lines.....
they was some okay punches but you need to make your bars rhyme aswell becuase if not your not going to win very many battles....you also need to work on your structure because the way you set it up fucked up shit for you and it was hard to read
keep elevating kid...and you should do fine.....e-z

v/virginia
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