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Old 05-26-04, 02:57 PM   #15
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this was a weak as fuck battle

both verse sucked...........PRO
your verse lacked the punches and was really weak........your need to work on your structure and re-wording your punches so that they hit harder.......you had a couple good lines but some of the concepts was played.....keep elevating

accomplishment-
what the fuck was you thinking.......your shit is like only 5 lines cause you just reaching for lines with that structure......your shit was weak and your punches didnt really stick.......work on your structure because that threw off your flow and made it hard to understand.....even if you had this battle one i would have looked down on your verse alot becaues of that structure

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