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Old 05-28-04, 11:43 AM   #8
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you gotta post your, .....wins to get jucied,
cuz i would to if i knew...
.... "little noise was produced",
im the dude to make..... t-lite insane,
cuz theres nothing you can say..


^^ not feeling the structure of your lines...it creates a choppy flow

punchwise...it was okay...could be more creative


Holding supersoakers, only way dude'll have a gat to spray,
And say t-lite is garbage right?...
...Even your names leaning that way!,
t-lite a male? I saw a pussy when I flipped on da light switch
I’m sure we’ve all figured out by ya style....
.... that uz a white bitch!!!

^^ Again, work on your structure. You are attempting to diss duke. BUt, the punches don't land that hard. For example, the supersoaker line could have hit harder had you reworded it and included some nice wordplay action.

Decent drop


Kountry Fella, go on and get ya facts straight,
Cuz you’re more fucced up than retards on liquid lactates //

^^ Whats with the smiley faces and graphics...ugh..leave em out...its annoying and gimmicky..punch was BLAH


When I speak….shhh…..They say Silence is bliss //
All you’re speakin’ is nonsense, to Decease & Decist //

Dawg, you had no structure lol....You only spit like 7 lines so I'll spit about eight...

^^^^ Punches are not landing...and the last part was tru...but thats verse feeding...and verse feeding is only acceptable when the rules allow it

blah...elevate both of u..add some complexity to your lines in the form of vocab, metas, wordplay, and more creative punches

Vote: BIG...at least an attempt at a battle verse