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Old 05-28-04, 08:29 PM   #30
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gotaass had decent lines, flow was a lil off, the ending was weak, and you had some nice personals, but the flow was a lil off. You gotta come with the harder punches, I said the personals were nice, but they played so Im not gonna give an example....cause there isnt one good enough to show...sry i mite be a lil hard on you.

k not by much, but the girl took this for the following better flow and vocabulary....therefore, making the verse more complex. you didnt have that many punchlines but these two were nice and prolly won you the battle, but please avoid like the only time you hard is watching men cause that is played out.....thanx....good battle...peace no hate....hope both are satisfied with what I said
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