n-sight -

ur shyt waz pretty good..i gotta be honest..i waz surprised to see wut i saw...n u hella elevated i guess...ur shyt waz like serious da whole time..but dat iz also good..ur story line waz really good...Now i got da fucken chillz afta readin dat shyt...hahaha...forealz i do..

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Weeks later, that same basement became our family room..like a den..
When one night, we heard the sound of a child laughing..but kind of dim..
After that, it became bumping in the ceilings..we were feeling puzzled..
And once the noises became constant..we started to wonder..
Come to find out..the house built before ours had burned to the ground..
There were 2 fatalities in all..Mrs. Caldwell and her child..

Sed by You
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did u want dat to rhyme????

Blak -

ur shyt waz best overall..cuz ur shyt waz funny...dats basicly wut i look for in topical battles...i especially like your ending..haha...ur shyt waz in topic though..i do'nt know wut da others are sayin..forealz like u hearin noises in ur basement..kreepin down there..killin da person wit a spade...well dat basicly gave u da win...




structure- blak
flow - both
comedic - blak
story line - sight
opener - blak
finisher- blak ( funny az hellz)

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