Quick Verse I wrote for a friend's song... tell me what y'all think...

Oh Shit, Hold up, That’s the break, just great, look who pulled up, KC’s Finest handin’ out shiners/
Makin’ y’all die virgins, We rip you apart like surgeons, Who They Want, Pimp, Pimp, Chicks?, Bend Over/
Ya’ll should Send over, The best y’all got, one line of mine, you just got shot, Cuz Village is a pro/
Village break ya ho, slow it down, the L-Town clown runnin’ into town with another round/
Hear the sound of peace breakin’ down, The weather callin’ for showers, Bullets, not the ones that grow flowers/
Leave y’all droppin’ like towers, I give the game powers, like my name was Rayovac, Hey I’m back on this track/
Murderin’ you ho, my status is quo, smokin’ dro, spittin’ this hot flow, The clip, turn you into strips/
Trick, slits, drawin’ blood like a Succubus, Put you in eternal peace with my funeral piece/
I come highly recommended by Slicky C, Midwest where we smoke that icky tree, Nasty, girl stick wit me/
Your so fine you’re the 1st pick by me, But cats, What I’m spittin’ ain’t blasphemy/
Cuz I’m blastin’ gs back to last century, Erase your face and memory banks of past history, Bitch to me?, Mafucka you’re a bitch to be/

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