I was feelin' that... structure kinda odd, but I was able to adapt.

Iunno... it was weird, cuz it was good, but it wasn't... no offense.

Good: The Block is Hot like a Tea Ketal Cuz Of all
The Gangstas Gettin Shit Settled
u No im No Fan of Rock n Roll..
But i stay wit that Heavy Metal
im Dangerous to This Rap Game
a Multi Talented Labron James
Wit Arms Programed to Snatch Watches

Bad: My Rhymes Silly wen it Comes to Makin That Milly..
Fuck That My Rhymes are Dumb Silly ya Herd
and i aint Talkin Bout no 4th Grade Curse Words
New To This Game n Makin a Deep Impact
in ya World..

You got good potential... so keep writin' man... The more you write, the better you get... and save all of your shit, even if it's wack.

Jus' some pointers... I liked your song tho, Hit me up when you got it on audio maybe I can feel it better when it's spit instead of writ.

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