this right here's just a rap battle,i aint dissin him//
he dissin me like a lil kid wit no disipline//

^^ wack and too simple

now you just missed the island and you hit the ocean//
the impact was so strong leavin yo remains straight floatin//
you wack and weak and im liften you like gravity//
you cant fight the pain im hurtin you bad enough like a cavity.


^^^^how does gravity lift? this is not well thought out...weak and wack

5/30




I treat this as my thesis Well written topic/
Broken down into peices
you can tell the style when I rock it
And stop it pop it
put ya shit in the safe and lock it
Used to have respect for the goldenstate
But now i can relate
Ya shit to a man masturbatin( NAASTY)
I spit shit like gold

^Not sure I like the way u presented ur bars...but, it flowed well and actually did some damage to the other cat...elevated on the complexity though, metas--wordplay


15/30


Vote: Kre