Rub the lamp make a wish but i'll still leave-you-guessin//
Your scared of losing i could tell this by-your-expression//
Good flow, but the punch wasn't too powerful... good flow and multies
im not only-messin,your perplexed by my sacred-scriptures//
Take-a-picture...you still can't see this guy-whos-ripped-ya?//
Thats cuz its perfect imagery permanently unspoilt captions//
Light the picture...you can b the artist while i burn your faction//
I think the flow is great, viable structure the word association in the whole four bars is decent, o.k closing punchline.
i can see there aint enough metaphors n personals in my verse to please ya//
i'll seize ya in my freezer you'll be stunned by the way that i tease ya//
Rock a bye baby...big kountry girl in a cradle//
no wonder he aint even looked at twice by a label!//
The flow is good, the text struc is fucced now, but it does still flow to a beat, I liked the last line but the opening three were a little weak.
I love to win but i aint gon' be afraid of what you might do//
I aint gonna waste tewnty of my top class lines on you//
yeah.. I think you knew you could have come better... you showed that your not garbage- but this time you just didn't have enough material with all the other battles you got goin on. Decent verse good luck in the future.
Hey..... knock knock.. is someone upstairs,
I know what i equal but what the fuck is A Squared,
funny opener, very basic but funny.
you need to take your self...... back to school,
cuz your learnin some fucked up math in "Blackpool",
man your a fool, i make you look like a cunt.... see,
this bitch is so stupid he misspelled my name, '@~country',
The first two lines in here aren't great still kinda basic, but the second bar is funny.
what the fuck man, your whole verse was ass,
i cant see by your spelling and math, that you'll never be 'top class',
that was pathetic, you should be reduced to tears,
i would to.. if i new ..
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Originally Posted by A-Cubed
im runnin dry on fresh ideas!
Good use of a quote, not super but good- creative on how you closed it though and there were a couple good punches in this entire verse... I know from reading other battles of yours its not as good as you could have came either so I would really like to see you two battle again in the future- but today I think BigK came through just because he had the punchlines that even though were basic, hit pretty well while I think A Cubed came with a better flow and I really liked his verse I just think BigKountry had a better directed set of punchlines...-I been tryin to poll this vote for 20 minutes and the site is givin me a hard time if it came up more than once sorry... Vote- BigK
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