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Old 06-03-04, 08:09 PM   #11
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guess lil trip showed a lil more experience but.........his structure was fucked and all of his lines were way to long.......too many lines where he would like say somethin and then basically repeat it......a few lines didnt rhyme no matter how hard u try to force them......u really cant try to pass that shit off in a TEXT battle......

way too many lines like...
right from the beginnin i told you i don like fags n you fit the Fag Description
u just repeated urself and stretched that shit WAYYYY further than it needed to be...

-Static- i mainly think u did better cuz u had a few punches that delivered harder than n e of his stuff.......u had a lot of lines where u set it up nice and then followed through weak or followed through with somethin that really had nothin to do wit da first line.......ehh u mainly need to work on your follow through...verse looked somewhat noobish at points but u are on so its ok......structure was easier to read but u stretched a few follow throughs

vote- static since he used a lot more personals which made his verse deliver a lot harder....plus his was easier to read
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