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Old 06-03-04, 09:19 PM   #12
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Rub the lamp make a wish but i'll still leave-you-guessin//
Your scared of losing i could tell this by-your-expression//


^^ u italicized the ends of your lines like you were accentuating the punches. But, since they didn't hit hard, I assume it was for the rhyme. However, they didn't really multi-syllable rhyme. So, it was only aiight...

i can see there aint enough metaphors n personals in my verse to please ya//
i'll seize ya in my freezer you'll be stunned by the way that i tease ya//
Rock a bye baby...big kountry girl in a cradle//
no wonder he aint even looked at twice by a label!//


^Nice rhyming...but, where are the punches?


Hey..... knock knock.. is someone upstairs,
I know what i equal but what the fuck is A Squared,
you need to take your self...... back to school,
cuz your learnin some fucked up math in "Blackpool",

^^^ simple, but at least ur punching in his direction

what the fuck man, your whole verse was ass,
i cant see by your spelling and math, that you'll never be 'top class',
that was pathetic, you should be reduced to tears,
i would to.. if i new ..

^^ decent...up complexity of metas/wordplay

this battle comes down to RHYMING or DISSES...and since its a battle..imma go with BIG because his verse, though it was simple, actualyl through punches in A's direction

Vote: Big
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