retired.
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Whoa, this was dissapointing as fuck. Enygma, clearly you weren't in the mood. I thought there was no way N Sight could lose, cuz your verse was pretty weak. But lose he did. You see, rug burn is played, oh so very played. Infant style, infantile? That's not wordplay, that's just suck ass. Of course infant style is infantile, thats what infantile means. It would be like me saying "This kid got a newbie style, newbie" ... wow. Not good.
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Just call me "V"..for "V"an Helsing causing this 'biter' hell..*
See, I'm from D.C.. but you got popped by the 'Sniper' and fell..**"
Blah. Stop putting ' ' around your punches, thats herbish. Stop explaining them, thats herbish. Also, stop stretching your lines, although these were ok. Also work on setting up punches, for example these two having nothing to do with each other.
The olympic thing was ok, but again ruined for being stretched and worded poorly.
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I'll 'punch down ur throat' with a 'watch on my wrist'..make u 'take ur time'..
So when u spit, ur thoughts will be 'clear crystal'..then I will 'BREAK ur mind'.."
No. If it was his watch on your wrist, this might make sense. Otherwise how is it "his time"? The wordplay fails. Also, the saying is crystal clear, and again the punch was not worded too well and was stretched a bit.
"Bitch, ur rhymes are played as fuck..ur vocab and multis is missin..
Tried to 'cook up hot shit'..so you fixed this 'herb-dish' in ur kitchen..***
Slim's writtens is slim pickins..I was lurkin' to merk this bitch..
Even ya man's disrespect you..like, "E's aiight but he ain't shit"..
'Enygma', I'll jab with machetes..chop u into a thousand piece stack..
Ur too simple, I 'solved the puzzle'..a picture of the wackest kid in rap.."
again, stop explaining punches. the herb-dish was kind of a nice concept, and was decent. And wtf is that "E's aight but aint the shit"? Who said that? If not, fake personal = gay, and the punch itself makes for a weak as fuck punch. I did like the way you took the played "enyga = puzzle/mystery" concept and included the picture part. This was your best punch of the battle I think, and especially because the setup actually had something to do with the punch. Do this more often.
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Kid, I got a trophy case style..I'm leavin u with a broken face..
All the hot artists in ur SIG..u got raped like the Kobe case.."
wtf?? this was terrible.
alright, so thats my little bit, try to improve where i said, you have some potential but you have to improve. work on set ups definetely, also a better set up means you will be able to develop the punch in the first line and not come stretched as fuck on some of those punches. Also, no more played shit like that second bar.
E - I won't comment, I know you're better than this, but your verse was mostly ass. Fortunatly for you, it was far more polished than N's ass. The only nice parts were the Kenwood/Barbie, the 12 oclock and the "below CS" thing. Closer the first line was ok, the second line wasted it.
Anyway like I said, E came more polished, less stretched, at least fresher concepts minus that pussy blood thing, and the cards which is getting a bit played. A little too much filler, but still enough to win. Solid and polished >> annoying, stretched and played.
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