Ayo I spit flames to break ya back// my ryhmes hit full force like an old mans heart attack// you don't want it wit D//I'm da one to shake ya life up,blow ya brains out leave em in ya mommas tip cup// AKA i know why ya name like dat// ya formally a bitch waitin to get ya teeth smacked//don't fight dat i've been gangsta bitch and u ain't shit//you betta off like a hooker and suckin my dick// ya shit couldn't be hard if u had viagra behind it// I'll cut ya head off and let ya mommas bitch ass find it// Then i'll come back 4 her ass then dice her wit glass// slit her fuckin throat and throw her body parts in da trash//Then come 2 her funeral and blow up ya casket u fuckin dirty bastard//

^^^ d-nice what the fuck is that its not a batle verse more like a paragraph
u need better flow and punches better strucutre and personals
overall *5* you need to work omn dis more^
cuz i garemntee with out personals u wont win and all this^ loost u the battle
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ayo your ass talking like y'all an o.g.s(original gangstas)//
but my crew will take your dead body out like grosiers(supermarket shit probably spelled wrong)//
ayo this cat acting like i'm afraid of DNyce//
But the only way he gonna shine is stepping into the reflection of my ice//
dawg you gonna hang down further than my necklace//
y you talking about guns when you teckless//
can just because i haven't taken off your head doesn't mean your on my resect list//
aka stand for a killin asshole cause i'm about to kill this asshole//
the only way you living is if you sell your soul//
look at what it says above your avatar "new to rapbattles"//
this site is for big boys go back to your mothers tits and your rattles//
oh and by the the way//
i don't no if you are but your mom is srceaming aka//
matter a fact i aint heard anyone give you props//
a dawg like me got you, your ma, and your pops//
calling out my name like damn he so good//
what the fuck you thinking you house aint your hood//
aka u need to work onb structure also and flow ur punches were there
but get some more personals and ull be good
overall *6*
just a step ahead of him ..
my vote aka
becuz he came harder and all around better

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