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Old 06-05-04, 11:44 AM   #4
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This nigga claim that he can flow, but he bought his rap from a cat for ten blows.
You must have a chemical imbalance or somethin', only Viagra keeps the blood pumpin'.
My rhymes will make you terminally ill, no one cares if you're dead but I'll secure the kill.


^^ Work on your structure by shortening up your lines dawg...also, work on complexity of punches and rhyme scheme


fam leave ya A B C rhymes at the Door//
evn if i gave you a free win you'd still want More//
nigga im like lloyd but witout tha Banks//
if we compare us, then your the lil bike and im tha Tank//
this isnt MTV im not aston kutcher and this battle aint a Prank//
when another loss is added to ya column i'll be the one to Thank//


^^ Simple...u need to make ur lines more complex with metas/wordplay...but, it was good enough to beat MERC. because your punches actually hit

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