i'll shoot ya with 40 caliber bullets in ya back and ya won't stand//
it would take "8 disciples" to be atleast have tha man i am//
Decent punch, Not great for an opener but decent.
with ill intetionz i blow ya whole crew and ya style//(get it "ill intetionz")
with flows that could take down tha whole empire state tower//
egh, not a great punch but not horrible
i'll cut ya open ta ya fucking stomach is showin//
then leave you in tha desert intill ya dry up chokin//
good flow
then i'll get ya sister.. rap her.. untill she's dead//
cut her open ta some things showin then lay her on the bed//
tie ya dad up so he can see whats happin from a view//
take ya moms brain out then cook it in a stew//
then you come home and i slice ya throat there//
throw ya in a hole don't-care if ya die there//
Nice little story, but its kinda basic in the style, however creative
now i'm done..... wit ya whole family at rest//
light a match and let the cops clean the mess//
Not a great closer.. I think you rhyme fine enough but in a battle I'd like to have more wordplay to make your punches hit harder, or actual factual information thats personal to diss on.. decent verse though.


"Witness The Death"
Shit i neva get tired of beaten bitches who talk like fuckin queers
This nigga aint an All Star at rap.. more like quoting spears
decent, not a great opener but it did the job nicely
this nerds excited - like most child porn perverts
And his skill level will crash - like "P.A.N.I.C" run Mcc servers "
lol, this made me chuckle- great wordplay really strong punch here
but maybe his demise at my hands was just a twist of fate....
take away a ' P ' and a ' R ' have this " rapper " screaming outRAPE...
lol, Ive seen this concept before but its a decent punch
I see the bitch in you Trigga - well excuse me hun! ....
this is emcee is ' Dying of heart failure ' - well excuse the ' PUN '....
LOL... good wordplay here... feelin this
it's a fact u've asked me how i got so smooth at the mic,
& i tried to teach u illness - apparently ur immune to advice!
Yo your punches have elevated heavily, props--
Its A ritual for me to dispose foes in deep holes like Grave sights'..
Ur wifes got ' Plumber ' over my name on the fridge - cuz the way I Lay Pipe...
LMAO- nice punch

OUTRO

Find the grip on .:ill intetionz:. -throats and squeeze tight till I cant hear em no-mo..
Shoulda-known.. no man can compete with this hell of a devil I-hold//--


Yo I think through sheer wordplay and punchline strength it was pretty obvious that 40 had this battle... There was too far a gap in rhyming experience here, Ima have to vote for 40 Cal... e.z
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