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Old 06-06-04, 03:00 PM   #12
Know-Gimix
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who you? bitch im known as the audio predator,
c quence may i suggest for you an audio editor,
Decent punch here, nothing spectacular though good flow.
im a force to be reckoned with your verse is just second shit,
i'll grab hold of the tech and rip who c quence think he's messin with,
The flows not bad But I think the punchlines need work here.
watch me wreck~this~bitch place a decision on his diagnostic,
he said he'd come and rock~shit if he had a skill he musta lost it,
Still a good flow-
Im not too sure if he's a guy so im gonna say "thats a liar",
he sucks a dick like he love it like baby's on pacifiers,
Kind of a basic concept but effective.
he's gettin tha rug cummy you think bein a thugs funny,
im connectin like slug-tummy substain deaths like drug money,
lol, I like the sustain deaths like drug money...
just listen to the pastor preach your a bitch thats past her peak,
the reaction after speech is like on news' disaster week,
- I think this could have been worded better for maximum effectiveness, but it flows well- all in all so far a decent verse.
the confession released like god used lightning for shock treatment,
my rhymes insane like mental patients it'd be frightening to stop treatment,
Good Wordplay here, you rhymed off the same word here which doesn't help though
you drop weak~shit u'd think that it's time to look for talent,-
This line sits solo by itself- I dunno- I think its a weak way to close it.- For the most part your verse had good flow but not too many insane punches, I think it will come with time though, nice post for someone new to the site- Good luck in the future.

unny cuz i didnt even know i was gonna battle you//
your tha type that couldnt fuck a bitch even if she straddled you//
lol, decent opener, the punchline worked decently here.
this is a blind spit, im blindfolded, and your shit looks pre-wrote//
memorized raps dont make it here dawg, ya level is demote//
I like the word play in the first line here, flows well.
im automatic static, my habit is dissin this rabbit//
this eradic spit is illmatic with sporadical dag-nabbits//
flows good, but no killer punchlines just a few multi-s
ya lookin at this shit with weary eyes like a sad faggit//
not able ta hold ya own glass, your like a bad cabinet//
lol, I think you coulda worded this better but its decent none-the-less, using wordplay
dumbass i bet you wear your jeans backwards like Criss-Cross//
ima make you jump bitch cuz ya spit was lyrical missed shots//
you tha type that still sports looney tune t-shirts//
im that hype which sorts goonie loons like you twurp//
I think you should have worded both of these bars differently, maybe some wordplay to play off missed shots- and I dont know what you coulda done to make the twirp line work but it doesn't as it is now.
ya tryed to sneak up on me thinkin you had tha upper hand//
i heard ya speakin like a squeekin lisp laden boy band//
werk on ya stinkin and reekin piss laden rhymes man//
egh, the flow is kinda off but it is a direct punch - I think you just need to work on keepin ur structure the same through the verse and work on your punches and wordplay a little to perfect it but this was a nice verse all in all... I'd have to say Cquence won this battle because he had more punchlines in his verse and thats the most important part of a battle.... Vote- Cquence.... Good Luck to both of you in the future.
Please return the fav with an honest vote peoples..
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=128356
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