Ok fuck the bullshit I just wanna make this one point,
If you guys are so good why fuck do you gota beg people to join
So your probably gonna hit me with some gangster shit… probably corny,
But with I don’t need for an umbrella to weather the “Storm... T”,


^^ Nice hard hitting personal...but, I've been begged by BOTH crews...LOL

Call me ‘fat kountry’, you’re the joke no one takes you serious,
I must a caught you at a bad time, actually it seams like every day you gota ‘period’,
So here’s something for your ‘bitch’ ass to have a ‘cramp on’,
You look bloated everyday, and I’ll leave you bloody like your draws wit no ‘tampon’,

^^ Hard hitting punches mixed with personals...nice...work on creativity with wordplay


24/30




bet he comes sayin im a traitor,check the tryout thread...woz a diss to u hoes!
sitin rite there under your nose..maybe u cudnt see it for all ya fat-rolls!
claiming u 2#ranked offensive tackle in new york...everyone knows ur a liar
sum cat checked it out! thats brian smith!..u jus a wannabe Mr tyre-hire

^^^ You have nice references in your raps. BUt, you need to work on structure here as well as set-ups of your punches

u might be B.i.g, so im pac,its "all eyez on me"...my "life goes on"...
i got u "hypnotised".. u can call me "nasty boy" but no one gonna "miss u" now ur gone...

^^ This did not flow well...I was not feeling the flow on your piece...it was disjointed.

20/30


Vote: BIG...better structure, flow, harder punches


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