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Old 06-08-04, 09:25 PM   #17
Know-Gimix
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I’m brawlic, brawl you for quarters, call this a warnin//
I’m the safest nigga in prison, call me the warden//
I use ‘black ink’ slipped in syringes to penetrate//
So you ‘take shots’ of my text, till ya liver dissentagrates// - Humerous opener, you've brought some funny punches here, used some different types of wordplay, I really felt the Inheritance line later on in the verse also... This wasn't the best I've seen you drop but still a good verse, I felt most of your punches and I think you were able to pull off higher complexity than your opponent here.


Im schoolin u...n im surprised u could find the nerve
cuz im the director...n ill show u theres action behind my words - I think this was your best bar of your verse, the punch was decent and the wordplay wasn't played, the rest of the verse however I found kind of basic, it had a good structure but the punchlines were very simple, and concepts I've seen before-- Decent Verse all in all but I think Maku came harder here... Good luck in the future.
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