this kid is calling himself TKO when he ain't even got no wins//
y you got pac as your rapper he a thug and you a good boy that don't commit sins//
when i battle you i commit five cause i kill ya//
i take you shit then a still bill ya//
i take gods name in vain like god damn this cat suxs//
i fucked your bitch for only a couple of bucks//
and then i disrepect you mom and dad//
i hate all these newb catz thinking that they bad//
you call your self a blimp because you easy to get popped//
and my ryhme skill can never be topped//
i say good bye and walk away then dude get him dropped//
^^ you had a fairly nice verse with fairly nice punches and flow nice drop ur punches were nothing speciel but they got the job done fo'sho.... you verse was overall good if i had to rank it i would rank it a *7* outa ten
man structure u need to really work on that.. this made ur verse a lil worse than it actually was but it did not hinder your victory overall u had nice shit work on personals and flow and structure..

why u actin all amp nigga like u mean//
when my gun flip herbs like a trampoline//
i see da hate in ya lyrics but da envy it shows more//
on da net u play hard but u a fag behind closed doors//
i done red tagged nigga's and i done closed stores//
and stole yours plus my flow sharper than old swords//
im here now only jus 2 smash dis hata//
clap at his brains and turn it into mashed potato's/
so run from it and catch a back stinger//
and don't hate dat im rollin up blounts da size of shaq fingers//
so run along and get ya troops//
cause we got shells dats da size of fruit loops//
and we blast gunz da sameway we shoot hoops//
and da barrell stem like hot soup so nigga gimme ya coup//
u need paper pockets skinny like snoop//
da only tree's u got r da one's on ya boots//

^^ hata?.. mashptatos? how the hell does that rhyme keep ur structure and flow tight you need much work on structure and flow.. punches were weak and shit a 6th grader would say at recess homie...
keep workin and stay strong.....
my vote | aka for stronger punches and better flow and wordplay

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