I wanna start by saying this is one of the best pieces I have read in a while. I liked ur descriptiveness and I was really getting visual images of what u were writing. The only advice I can give is dont stop now, continue to get better and elevate ur thinking and rhymes. Keep doin wut u were doin.
*muy bueno*
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Pestilence / Plague
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.. Among this apocaliptic apex .. Plague played his part ..
Leaving the world astounded with an outbreak of SARS
.. No one was safe from harm; the disease increased its cause ..
.. through the un-knowingly infected, eager to leave the shores ..
And escape the sudden outbreak; consuming their city
As an increasing death-toll has them doomed in self-pity
The news reached a global audience; announced on TV
.. Brought to the world's attention ..
.. Plague had done what it set out to achieve ..
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^^^^ Straight sick......no pun intended.
Check my piece out while ur at it.