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Old 06-11-04, 05:35 PM   #25
sicker_than_HIV
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this battles In my favor, I own the element of suprise//
i bet you had no idea this outsider digged guys//

good opener..funny line, well set up

if Your lyrics took extenze, they still couldn't enhance//
you couldn't be packin if you had glocks and socks down ya pants

pretty clever and funny line, bottom bar was a tad stretched i felt.


Let me give you some advice, don't ever play with fire//
Melt you in a copper pot than spit my shit "through the wire

not bad, but it seemed like a filler to me


Now class is in session//I'll give you a lesson//
on how multies can be used as a very dangerous weapon//

good introduction because you did actually use multis, and you used them well

I'll rip you to pieces// as my blood lust increases//
fold each of your cells in half than rip em at the creases//
drown you in 10 different greases//not all of the police's//
could stop my flow to keep this faggot from ceasin//

I liked the rip you to pieces and rip the cells at the creases part a lot...i like how it tied in to tearin him up...good good use of multis


now he's not believen//in the religion that gave his soul freedom//
because he prayed to his God but nobody stopped his bleedin//

okay multi, seemed like another filler

out of pitty// i picked him up and dragged him through the city//
dropped him off on his porch lookin far from pretty//

good multis especially since it's a story

knocked on his door than ran so his parents wouldn't spot me//
But I guess he wasn't dead because he told his folks "WILDFIRE DONE GOT ME"//


very good end to the story, and the battle as a whole, you duidn't have too many punches, you didn't have too many personals, but the one or two you did have were good. and your verse was very creative, your style is strange, but whatever works for you


Now onto you outsider, you kept coming with the punches, but most were fairly weak



your like a desease u can't disinfect , you attract like a fuckin magnet/
take ur shit n disconect, im like a bone cruncher wid no disresprect/

he attracts like a magnet? what does thta have to be with bein a disease? or anything else?

and your like a bone cuncher with no disresect, why no disrespect? that weakend your punch a lot



okay, as much as i want to analyze every line, i can't because there not good, thats all i can say about all of them, none of your lines struck me at all as being even close to decent


vote: wildfire